Sigmund walked into town; the villagers
stopped what they were doing to stare. Sigmund was used to it. He was a
behemoth of a man. A white bear’s pelt covered his chainmail but still allowed
easy access to the two swords on his back. That sort of a man attracts a lot of
attention: both wanted and unwanted. He
walked up to the town’s center and eyed the notice board. He made his way to it
and plucked off a piece of paper from it. WANTED:
MONSTER HUNTER. Sigmund pulled a piece of paper from his
pocket and unfurled it. He held them side by side to compare them. They were
the same: he knew he had arrived in the right town. Sigmund made his way to the
inn, figuring the innkeeper would know a thing or two about what he was about
to hunt.
Authors's Note
In the original story, Krishna notices that some cattle and some of his friend are disappearing near a cave. He goes to investigate and finds that it is the mouth of a giant snake demon. The demon tries to bite down on Krishna, but Krishna grows in size eventually breaking its jaw and killing it. I replaced Krishna with monster hunter. I made the cave an actual cave and replaced the demon with a vampire.
References
Nivedita. Krishna. The Dilemma of Brahma.
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“I’ve heard you’ve got yourself a bit of
a problem.” Sigmund said, unfurling the bounty notice and placing it in front
of the innkeeper.
“Aye,” the innkeeper replied gruffly, “And
what’s it to you?”
“I’m looking to solve this problem for
you. What can you tell me about it?” Sigmund asked.
The innkeeper’s shoulders grew heavy hoping
that he would not just be sending another man to his death. He called his
assistant to cover the bar as he motioned Sigmund over to the kitchen. Sigmund
followed after him.
“I apologize fer the attitude, Mister.
See, the townsfolk have grown restless. There’s a cave not too far to the east.
Used to be a pretty popular spot for the kids to play around. But then the kids
started to disappear near the cave. They said that they would go in, but only
some of them would come back out. Some of the men went to the cave to find
them, but they never came back neither. And then, people started to disappear
at night too. We don’t know what to do anymore. If you can help us, well, we
can’t give you much, but we can give you everything we got to give.”
Sigmund obliged. “Don’t worry. I’ll take
care of this for you.”
Since the attacks only happened in a
dark cave or at night, Sigmund resolved that it was likely a vampire, but he
would have to make sure. Sigmund waited until it was dark, suspecting that the
creature would likely leave it’s dwelling at night. As nightfall came, Sigmund headed
east towards the cave.
The Cave
With a torch lit, he headed inside to
look around. Less than twenty feet in he saw them. Bodies. At least twenty of
them. But they were all still intact. Sigmund walked amongst them. They were
all pale. He knelt down and inspected the body of a man. There were holes in
his neck. Bitemarks. I haven’t dealt with
a vampire in years. Should be fun.
Sigmund exited the cave with his suspicions confirmed. He carried two
swords on his back. One steel, the other silver. While silver itself did little
to harm vampires, his blade had been blessed by a priest years prior. Sigmund
pulled it from its scabbard. He sat down to begin his preparations. He pulled
out a small vile of holy water from a pouch. He poured it gently over his blade
and rubbed it into the metal. The blade began to glow softly. Then, he waited.
The creature would have to come back to its den before sunrise.
As dawn approached, Sigmund saw two eyes
staring him down. In front of him was the silhouette of a thin and lanky human.
But Sigmund knew what it was really that he was facing. He stood up and readied
himself for the fight ahead.
The creature was fast, but Sigmund was
faster. With one swift strike, the creature was cut cleanly in two. That, however, would
not be enough to kill it. As what remained of its upper half struggled to pull
itself back into the cave, Sigmund pulled out his steel sword and drove into
the creature, pinning it to the ground. The creature struggled, wailing horribly, but could not
pull itself free. Sigmund, knowing the fight was over, sat down to rest. The
sun slowly began to rise, disintegrating the creature as the rays of light
crawled up its skin.
Authors's Note
In the original story, Krishna notices that some cattle and some of his friend are disappearing near a cave. He goes to investigate and finds that it is the mouth of a giant snake demon. The demon tries to bite down on Krishna, but Krishna grows in size eventually breaking its jaw and killing it. I replaced Krishna with monster hunter. I made the cave an actual cave and replaced the demon with a vampire.
References
Nivedita. Krishna. The Dilemma of Brahma.
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Chris, I really liked your story this week, I was able to see both the original story, and a bit of the game Witcher in the narrative. The mysterious monster hunter, roaming town to town, with his varying weapons for varying enemies, is what made me think of this comparison. Your description of the characters' body language helps add more meaning to the dialogue, and an excellent touch.
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoy medieval and fantasy stories, and yours was fantastic. I didn't know what story you were recreating until I read your author's note, and then it finally hit me! Your story was a great balance between the original and your own twist. One thing I would consider changing is the spacing, specifically when Sigmund sees the bounty paper. If you put the phrase, "Wanted: Monster Hunter" on it's own line without anything else around it, it would really put emphasis and bit more suspense into the story. Overall, I really enjoyed your story!
What a fantastic story you have written, Chris! The story is thoroughly descriptive and allows readers to paint a picture while they are reading it. I liked the changes you made to the original story but still kept the same basic storyline. It was mentioned in the story that Sigmund thought it was a vampire but his suspicion was not necessarily confirmed. Maybe you could describe the vampire in more details when Sigmund sees the "two eyes starring him down..." Overall, great story!
ReplyDeleteHey Chris! It is great to read your story from week 11! It was definitely a different style from what other people in the class are using. I really enjoy reading fantasy fiction and this style fits well with interpreting an epic. Good job! Will you use this story for your portfolio? It would be great to read the full and developed version of the story.
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